Fog Index

SAMPLE OF MY WRITING
"The city of San Francisco has recently created a new law that went into effect on the first of January of this year that will help to curb obesity from further manifesting itself in it’s citizens; the Bicycle Tax Credit (BTC). Passed as part of the $700 billion bailout plan, the BTC has granted tax cuts to those who commute to work via bicycle. The law also allows employers to reimburse their bicycle-commuting employees up to twenty dollars per month for bicycle-commuting related expenses that may come up (Westlind 2008). This law helps to fight the obesity epidemic by giving people a monetary incentive to exercise and practice healthy habits."

FOG INDEX :18.1

WHAT I HAVE LEARNED FROM THIS
Wow! I really need to cut my sentences short! Looking back I could have shortened the first sentence into two different sentences and maybe used a couple of simpler words to make this more friendly on the eyes. I need to keep it short and sweet!